Initial feedback video- first film draft (old narrative)

After putting together the first part of my initial rough cut, I showed the clip to a couple of members of my target audience. The first person I asked was Flynn, who is 7, and the second James who is 14. Both gave me useful feedback as to what I needed to improve on. The draft that I showed them did not include the re-written narrative, which meant that the storyline was not clear to them. Now that I have addressed this and added more sound effects I think I will receive a more positive reaction from feedback.